The Cottage Smallholder

Hey All!

I think you may know I have been doing things with concrete lately.

A few days ago I was asked to do a commission.

An on-line friend asked me if I would be interested in creating a memorial stone for his daughter.

I said "of course" so now we are working on a sentament.

Her name is Katie Erika Miller, and from the letter symbolism of her name her father got the sentament/phrase...

"Come dance with me on the water".

I was doing some research on poetry with parent/child symbolism, and I came across the idea of teaching your children to dance on the tops of your feet, so I came up with...

"You learned to dance on the tops of my feet,
now may you dance on the tops of the waves…"

I like the imagery, but the phrasing needs help.

I need something short, it can't be too wordy.

The image of dancing and water is importaint to the family.

So for all of you writing/poet types, here is a chalenge for you today. Can you think of something?

I am probably going to use a mold that allows me 7 lines, and depending on the words used I can get 3 to 4 words (possibly 5 if the words are small) per line.

Any ideas?